Indeed, That's What She Said

You never realize how important dialogue is until you read through something you’ve written and realize there’s no way anyone on this planet would speak in such an incessantly gaudy way.  Dialogue isn’t supposed to make a reader stop and question a character’s realism.  It’s supposed to be a vehicle for storytelling and character development.  When utilized to its fullest potential, dialogue is a remarkable tool that can be shaped and conformed to fit any story’s specific needs.  If you want your novel to take place in a Victorian Era city, your dialogue would sound much different than if it were to follow the exploits of a thug growing up in modern day New York.  You see, it can provide insight into a story’s setting just as easily as it can exemplify a character’s personality and key traits.  Knowing this, it’s easy to assume that the possibilities of what dialogue can do are far greater than even I know.  Here are some of the ways I try to use it to its fullest extent.

“Why the hell couldn’t we take the stairs?”

By far the most obvious use of dialogue is characterization.  The way a character speaks says a great deal about who they are.  For instance, a boy who speaks in short, spastic sentences might be labeled as hyperactive and annoying.  On the other hand, a boy who always uses long sentences and extravagant words might be considered arrogant and coy.  The subtle in between, a boy who speaks naturally in colloquialisms and knows precisely when to shut up, will be portrayed as average and realistic.

Another thing to consider is the power of curse words.  In society it’s common to hear these flagrant attempts at badass-ness spewed in everyday conversation, but they speak volumes of the person using them.  Someone who freely uses such vernacular can be viewed as lacking morals, whereas someone who only uses questionable language in intense situations is probably impulsive.

Here are a few examples of how I’ve used dialogue to characterize in the first three chapters:

“Oh, Luke,” Silvia sighs.  “Whatever you do, don’t look at your arm.”

-> I’ve done a few things here.  First, by using Lucas’ nickname when she hasn’t up until that point, it’s made apparent that Silvia has a softer side.  She’s let her guard down because she’s honestly worried about Lucas.

“Oh, I get it,” Lucas says.  It’s all he can do to keep his voice down; every time it raises an octave, a fresh wave of pain shoots down his arm.  But his frustration brims with each car she swerves around and narrowly avoids colliding into.  “Like a personal ad?  I enjoy long walks on the beach, having a good time, jumping out of fourth story windows and driving like a lunatic.”

-> As everyone can probably tell, Lucas would like to think of himself as a comedian. Whether he is or isn’t is something for you as a reader to decide, but I’ve done more than just show that side of him here.  I’ve also suggested that he’s not someone to let things go.  Considering only minutes before he’d almost been engulfed by a raging inferno, it makes sense, but the way he uses snappy humor to cope with it says more about his personality than any description could.

Tag, You’re It

Dialogue tags are every writer’s worst nightmare.  At least mine, anyways.  They’re the action word we use to show when someone is speaking.  They can be as simple as “said,” or as descriptive as “choked,” but either way they are used to further explain how the speakers say whatever it is they say.

Personally, I’ve heard many complaints about my use of dialogue tags.  You’re using too many.  They’re not varied enough.  They’re too varied.  Anyone who uses a dialogue tag other than “said” or “ask” obviously doesn’t know how to write.  Well, you’re wrong.  I’m sorry, but you are.  There’s no “right way” to write.  Sure, some ways are more effective than others, but every writer has their own personal style and I’ve read such a variety that I honestly don’t care one way or the other, as long as it’s engaging.

My one piece of advice though, would be not to use too many.  It is something I was guilty of, I have to admit, and now that I’ve adapted my style to fit this suggestion I know it’s improved.  Most of the time a dialogue tag is unnecessary.  Instead, have the character speak and get right into their corresponding action.  It’s a lot easier to read,

“Hi.”  Suzie smiled and shook my hand.

Than it is to read,

“Hi,” said Suzie, smiling as she shook my hand.

Here’s an example straight out of chapter three:

“One of her few character flaws.”  He laughs, a contagious chuckle that brings a smile to Lucas’ face.  “Next time I send you to retrieve someone, Silvia, try and bring them back in once piece.”

I feel this more actively expresses the character’s (Harland’s) actions and flows better than if it were to use a dialogue tag.  So, in this case, less can certainly be more, but as with everything it’s about finding the perfect in between.

Information Overload

Dialogue is also a perfect way to explain something about your story without taking a few long, drawn out paragraphs to do so.  As long as it sounds natural and could potentially come up in ordinary conversation, an exchange between two, or even a few characters is the perfect way to avoid the dreaded “info dumps.”  Let's face it, a conversation between friends, two people who are romantically involved, or even arch nemeses, is going to be much more interesting to read than three pages worth of dry exposition.

Let Dialogue do the Talking

It's simple.  Utilizing dialogue effectively makes a story more interesting to read.  Some of my favorite authors use it in ways that were both original and engaging.  Take Cormac McCarthy, for example, and his novel No Country for Old Men.  In the book, he used dialogue is used to a great extent, the only difference being that he rarely used any tags at all and when he did they were simple and concise.  If you haven’t read the book I suggest you do, because it’s interesting to experience varied styles and fills your own writer’s toolbox with skills for later use.  I’ll leave you with one of my favorite quotes from this book, which speaks volumes of the power of perfect dialogue. . .

“You think when you wake up in the mornin yesterday don't count. But yesterday is all that does count. What else is there? Your life is made out of the days it’s made out of. Nothin else.” -Cormac McCarthy, No Country for Old Men

That's all for now.

~A Fellow Writer

PS, if you hadn't noticed, Chapter Three is uploaded.  Read at your leisure!